@ LoreZyra and @ Susana Buono
"Citizens of Earth"
You have both rightly articulated the error in using this. But let me explain my intent and hopefully we can find a simple solution. I do not presume to speak for every human living on Earth and I understand, and its a very good point, that Earth is not a nation or state therefor has no citizens of it. I was attempting to use a term that clearly defined use, Asgardians, as separate from our fellow "homeland" citizens.
If I understand correctly, we need to identify ourselves as separate form those who do not wish to become citizens of Asgardia in order to declare ourselves, our intentions, and our goals. At which point we can proclaim our declaration and in it our name (what we wish to be called) and all other things that a declaration does. I would be open and interested in any suggestion of a name or a designation to which to define ourselves before a proper declaration. It will have to accurately represent all of us form many countries but separate us from our fellow countryman.
"pursuit of Peace"?
I chose to use Peace for two reason. First, because it is slightly more objective than happiness. Yes, I did emphasize slightly. But I think that we need to attempt to at least clearly write our intentions as objectively as possible as to me understood for generations and unmistaken in our meaning.
- freedom from disturbance; quiet and tranquility.
- freedom from or the cessation of war or violence.
- the state of being happy
And second because it was a primary intent of our founder.
"The essence of Asgardia is Peace in Space "
I also think that a pursuit of peace will always be in conflict with war but I do not think that the inevitable conclusion is continuous war. I think it quite possible to pursue peace without being at or going to war.
As a side note, I don't for a minute think that we will end war any time soon but I think that the trend of violence throughout human history is in the down ward direction. Humans have become less violent as civilized societies prevail.
"mankind are more disposed to suffer..." Really?
I think you misunderstand this and I'm glade you pointed it out as I think that our Declaration of Unity needs to be unmistakable. It is important to understand this phrase in context. It is stating that humans are predisposed to suffer than to change the structure at which they are use to. This is speaking of the structures of government specifically and human tendency more generally. Put simply, humans fear change. Taken in context with the rest of the sentence it is saying that the actions we are taking are not to be made for trivial matters. I think our founder and we do not see it as such. We understand that international law and equal access to space is a human imperative that needs to be secured.
"evils are sufferable" ?
RIGHT, again LoreZyra. As bigred has stated and I think many find obvious, that I have innocently plagiarized the United States Declaration of Independence, just a bit. I did this in an attempted to use it more as an architect for our Declaration of Unity and less as an attempt to implant ideas and principals from the United States into Asgardia. I hope it is not perceived as such.
A better word might be "transgressions". I am open to any word that accurately articulates "bad things to happen" in the context of the document. But this might be a bit too dramatic for our Declaration.
"the protection of Earth"?
I think bigred has stated well and maybe I can to elaborate on this.
It has been clearly stated by our founder as an initial if not primary intent of Asgardia.
"The second is to protect planet Earth from space threats"
I did not add "all of humanity" because I think that in the very distant future, when humans are multi planetary, it will be a mistake to attempt to protect all human settlements all over our solar system or, if ever, the galaxy. That would be too taxing on resources, will, and political consensus of means or intent.
If we were to declare this in the constitution and not in the Declaration of Unity if would deny the document of our intent. Protection of Earth being one of our primary intents.
"all Citizens of Earth regardless of any and all limitations of their earthly citizenship"
Here, I was attempting to offer the Ministry of Immigration a guideline. Although it seems in error, as you have pointed out. We do not intent, "to ensure equal opportunities in space for all Citizens of Earth regardless of any and all limitations of their earthly citizenship." But rather I think we do wish, "to ensure equal access to space for all humans regardless of any limitations of their earthly citizenship." I also recognize your point. We do not wish to provide a loophole for people who have been convicted of crimes.
"to ensure equal access to space for all humans regardless of any limitations."
Might be a better way to word it. But reading this got me thinking. "any limitations.." What kind of limitations? What limitations are we attempting to circumvent?
This might be a discussion too deep for a forum. Maybe left best to future philosophers.
"based on the birthright of Humanity in the universe..."
I was attempting to articulate the fact that we all have a fundamental right given at birth to make such a declaration. I think that this may bring up many questions but if we don't get our authority to make this declaration as a right of birth then where do we?
A better way might be to state "based on the birthright of Humanity..."
"recognized by the United Nations..."
Isn't this what our Declaration is attempting to do? We wish to be recognized by the United Nations and the Nations of the world as "a free and independent Nation"? It can be until we appeal and declare our intentions? That we ought to be "a free and independent Nation", recognized by the United Nations, that this declaration is our statement of autonomy as a self governing body?
I think the key part is "ought to be"
I might add, "and of Right ought to be a Free and Independent Nation, recognized by the United Nations and all other Nations of the World:"
"as Free and Independent States..."
Yes, this was a typo. It should be singular. Although this got me thinking. Are we petitioning to be a Nation- a group of people who share the same culture but do not have sovereignty, or a State- a self-governing political entity? I am mostly concerned about the wording but this has implications for the future of Asgardia and for it's legal authority.
"we mutually pledge to each other our Lives, our sacred Honor..."
I have no problem with this being removed or reworked. I left this in as an option as to our current and future dedication. I understand that we intend to be a peaceful entity so this may very well just be removed or state, " we mutually pledge to each other our Honor and our dedication..."
- Adam Spears