Mar 29, 17 / Tau 04, 01 02:23 UTC
Re: Discussion of the Declaration of Unity ¶
I forgot about the header in my previous post so here goes:
We, the free people of the first in the history of existing humanity Space country ASGARDIA, based on the birthright of Man in the universe, adopt this DECLARATION
Without being too critical this just doesn't work in English. We all know what it is trying to say however the translation isn't working. Maybe something like:
We, the free people of the space nation Asgardia, adopt the following principles as a declaration of our unity and the basis of the first space nation
We, the free people of the space nation Asgardia, make the following declaration of principle
We, the free people of the first space nation Asgardia, declare and adopt the following principles
We, the free people of Asgardia, declare the following to be true principles of our society and adopt them as our own
We, the free people of Asgardia, declare the following
or something similar.
if something is "adopted" it must be for a purpose and that purpose must be stated (as it is not implied, like in adopting a child) If something is declared it is usually declared as the reason, support or basis for another purpose. If Asgardia is to be claimed the first space nation then it does not need to be justified by birthright etc. The justification is in the creation, which I think we can agree is on it's way to being done. Besides, the universe does not give us a birthright. Further, if we think it is the birthright of "man" then what if we find other life forms? aren't we just enacting the thinking of our predecessors who claimed that God gave them a right to treat others badly.
Let's just stick to the facts that we want a space nation, it (and us as citizens) will behave in a certain way and unify around certain goals and principles.